Today was a busy
day with school and everything, but I got to listen to music between
classes and brainstorm stories.
This story gave
me some nice practice in describing people. I think you'll enjoy it.
The Dance of the Elements
The Elementals
enjoyed their parties as much as the Sun in the sky. They spent much
of their time preparing only for their parties. Dances were rehearsed
so much they became as natural as breathing.
Each Elemental
dressed in their best clothes. Fire dressed in a black dress that
showed off her burning red eyes and orange hair. She danced with even
steps. The forests in the mortal world turned to ash when she walked
over them.
Mountains
parted and cities crumbled when Earth walked up to Fire. He had broad
shoulders, light brown skin and oil black hair. He wore a dark green
suit that stretched to fit his wide, muscular frame. He held out his
hand to her. She grabbed his hand and they began to dance. Volcanoes
formed as they waltzed through the mortal world.
Water ran her
delicate fingers through the ground, leaving pure rivers behind. She
sat with a mellow smile. She loved the parties but was too timid to
dance, unlike her sister Wind who happily danced with anyone. She
envied the Elementals that danced through the mortal world in pretty
couples. She feared she would be lonely again despite her beautiful
blue dress and eyes. The shadow of a man then fell over her.
“Why won't
you stand up and dance m'lady?” a soft and strong voice asked her.
The man had a youthful face and bone white hair that fell down onto
his shoulders. He had deep blue eyes that matched her own. It was
Moon, the Elemental that every girl wanted to have hold their hands.
She couldn't
think of any words to respond with so she stood up and held out her
hand. He held it gently while he tugged her toward him. He danced
with quick feet and she had difficulty keeping up with him at times.
As Moon and Water danced oceans rose and fell while rivers shook.
The Sun soon reached
twilight.
“I'm sorry,
but I must go. The night needs me.” Moon said with a regretful
smile. “I hope we dance again soon.” Moon then faded into the
sky.
“Of course we
will.” Water responded. She already longed for the next dance in
the mortal world.
Just lovely, Langdon. And yes, well done on the characterization. Hard to do in such a short format.
ReplyDeleteThanks. These stories are helping me learn to show who a character is fast. I've learned its more about what you have them do, not what you have them say.
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