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Wednesday, January 25, 2012

The Dance of the Elements


Today was a busy day with school and everything, but I got to listen to music between classes and brainstorm stories.

This story gave me some nice practice in describing people. I think you'll enjoy it.

The Dance of the Elements

        The Elementals enjoyed their parties as much as the Sun in the sky. They spent much of their time preparing only for their parties. Dances were rehearsed so much they became as natural as breathing.
        Each Elemental dressed in their best clothes. Fire dressed in a black dress that showed off her burning red eyes and orange hair. She danced with even steps. The forests in the mortal world turned to ash when she walked over them.
        Mountains parted and cities crumbled when Earth walked up to Fire. He had broad shoulders, light brown skin and oil black hair. He wore a dark green suit that stretched to fit his wide, muscular frame. He held out his hand to her. She grabbed his hand and they began to dance. Volcanoes formed as they waltzed through the mortal world.
        Water ran her delicate fingers through the ground, leaving pure rivers behind. She sat with a mellow smile. She loved the parties but was too timid to dance, unlike her sister Wind who happily danced with anyone. She envied the Elementals that danced through the mortal world in pretty couples. She feared she would be lonely again despite her beautiful blue dress and eyes. The shadow of a man then fell over her.
        “Why won't you stand up and dance m'lady?” a soft and strong voice asked her. The man had a youthful face and bone white hair that fell down onto his shoulders. He had deep blue eyes that matched her own. It was Moon, the Elemental that every girl wanted to have hold their hands.
        She couldn't think of any words to respond with so she stood up and held out her hand. He held it gently while he tugged her toward him. He danced with quick feet and she had difficulty keeping up with him at times. As Moon and Water danced oceans rose and fell while rivers shook.
        The Sun soon reached twilight.
        “I'm sorry, but I must go. The night needs me.” Moon said with a regretful smile. “I hope we dance again soon.” Moon then faded into the sky.
        “Of course we will.” Water responded. She already longed for the next dance in the mortal world.

2 comments:

  1. Just lovely, Langdon. And yes, well done on the characterization. Hard to do in such a short format.

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    1. Thanks. These stories are helping me learn to show who a character is fast. I've learned its more about what you have them do, not what you have them say.

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