Anyway, now for today's story!
A Hero's Trailing Thoughts
Too impressive
to be called soldiers, but too human to be called weapons the
superheroes of the new age walked the Earth as gods. A brilliant
scientist decided one day to defy God and invented a substance that
would alter someone's body and turn them into a super being. He made
evolution obsolete, though the substance would only affect certain
people based on their genetic code. Though not based on eye color,
skin color or anything resembling a race, it affected a little pile
of junk DNA on the far side of the human genome that no scientist
gave a second glance to before the substance's invention.
An aged
superhero stood on the balcony of a massive skyscraper's 50th
floor. Throughout his youth he psychically scouted out crime from
that balcony. The substance gave different gifts to different people,
but none of the gifts lasted forever. His visions of crime used to be
clear and detailed, but now they came to his head like television
static. Before he could fly over the city, but now he could only
stare at the skyline from his balcony. He saw a large mountain in the
distance. He remembered his secret hideout in that mountain, he
figured now it was probably just a home for rats.
He remembered
bringing crooks to their knees with a thought. He remembered reading
Dr. Demolish's mind to figure out where the villain planted the
bombs. He remembered creating a psychic barrier to protect the city
from a tornado created by a weather machine.
He held his
tattered cape in his hands, the only part of his costume left. Its
light blue cloth still had his emblem in it. Though now the emblem
was just a barely recognizable “T”. His mind wandered and he
thought of his sidekick, who joined a superhero team long ago. He
also thought of his relationship with an anti-hero, but she refused
to play by anyone's rules so he couldn't stay with her.
He then thought
of the normal people he now passed by everyday. Now that his powers
wore away he was among them, but he didn't have any of their
experiences. Heroes were taken out of schools, relationships and jobs
to serve justice and stop those who would abuse the power of the
substance. He thought of all the lives he saved, but also thought of
the fact he lost most of his.
He threw his
cape off the balcony and went back inside to watch TV.
I love how you set up your world in one short para, then revealed your character's entire story in a few more paragraphs. My only suggestion would be that you made the transition between the two a bit more smoother. I felt such a great empathy for your hero in a short time. Well done, as always.
ReplyDeleteThanks! I really try to work with my flash fiction format the best I can. I'll try to make the transition smoother then.
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